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Pillar of the Community
United States
797 Posts |
Dansco stares at me
One final coin fills his void
the battle goes on...
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Pillar of the Community
United States
3486 Posts |
stud722, NO apology necessary. Just want to take a good haiku and make it great.
Gosh darn, the talent is just pouring out!
Nathan, nice. I'd add a colon ":" after "Denominations."
I love the five syllable word!
Edited by matthewvincent
02/28/2013 11:12 pm
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Pillar of the Community
United States
797 Posts |
Silver drops in price
Franklin smiles knowing he's mine
might buy his friends too
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Pillar of the Community
United States
1511 Posts |
My favorite coins
Seated liberties, Morgans
To me stand on top
Edited by NathanASE
02/28/2013 11:37 pm
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Pillar of the Community
United States
3453 Posts |
My third
Coin in hand with loupe,
Very Attractive Morgan.
Look, look, look, look, look.
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Pillar of the Community
United States
3486 Posts |
Oh POOP! Did I just
Give bucks to mother, dear? Well,
I owe her as much.
Poets, watch your punctuation!
It counts!
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Pillar of the Community
United States
1511 Posts |
Trapped forever in
A date they cannot escape
Such is life for coins
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Pillar of the Community
United States
655 Posts |
This is cool. I'm no poet but, hey, I'll give it a shot. Here are three for your consideration:
once in a child's hand
the dime was spent on candy
it rests, collected
the coin collector
is flat broke and deep in debt
but still has money
a silver nickel
found in a roll from the bank
fills an album hole
Edited by NJ Bob
03/01/2013 12:00 am
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Pillar of the Community
United States
3486 Posts |
Nathan,
Change
Trapped forever in
A date they cannot escape
Such is life for coins
to
Trapped forever!
A date they cannot escape.
Such is life for coins.
Proper meter plus punctuation = a great haiku!
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Pillar of the Community
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3486 Posts |
NJ Bob,
I can never spell "nickle" correctly: it is "nickel."
Otherwise, you are in the running!
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Pillar of the Community
United States
655 Posts |
Quote:
I can never spell "nickle" correctly: it is "nickel." Thanks for the catch.  The only thing worse than my poetry is my spelling. |
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Pillar of the Community
United States
2224 Posts |
My 2nd.
Awesome key date coin
Something's wrong can't be that cheap
Chinese counterfeit
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Valued Member
United States
360 Posts |
"You're too drunk with joy"
The sweet taste of addiction
"Please sir, one more roll"
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Pillar of the Community
United States
1195 Posts |
I'll give this a go:
Ugly round metal
Struck hard, on a texture flat
Beauty long after
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Pillar of the Community
 United States
2480 Posts |
Regarding the 5-7-5 syllable rule: This convention arose when English-speaking poets adopted the haiku form. As you would expect, there are translational issues and language structure issues when trying to write haiku in English rather than in Japanese. I'm not going to be a stickler for the 5-7-5 count with this contest. Also, there may be differences in how people pronounce and count syllables in certain words. An example from NathanASE's last poem, first line: "trapped forever in", to which MatthewVincent felt it should be "trapped forever!". Nathan's syllable count of 5 is correct but Matthew felt the shortened first line resulted in improved meter, or perhaps he pronounces 'trapped' as 'trap-ed' rather than 'trapt'. To quote teenagers everywhere, 'whatev.'  I'm just impressed with all these poems! You folks are exceeding my expectations. Some are truly touching. It is going to be very hard to select one favorite. We've had many serious poems. I'd like to see some funny ones too, so don't feel like they all have to be deep. Since there's no limit to the number you can submit towards the Best Haiku prize, feel free to post as many as desired. Reminder: you only have to post one haiku to be entered into the raffle; if at the time of the drawing you have "Supporter" under your name, you will have 4 additional tickets into the raffle. That does not increase with additional haiku submissions but submitting more poems may increase your chances that I'll find your poem to be the most pleasing (Best Haiku prize). |
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